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Motivational letter need some help

Hi my friends,
I'm from France and I need to write a motivational letter to enter in an international section ( at lycée )
I has began my letter with :
Dears ,
This letter of application to tell you how motivated I am


Infortunely i'm not really good at english and i'm not sure about " this letter OF APPLICATION " and I think that I has forgotten " is " between application and " to tell you "
Would you please be so kind as to help me?

Thank you
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Old 11.03.2016, 18:55
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Hi my friends,
I'm from France and I need to write a motivational letter to enter in an international section ( at lycée )
I has began my letter with :
Dears ,
This letter of application to tell you how motivated I am


Infortunely i'm not really good at english and i'm not sure about " this letter OF APPLICATION " and I think that I has forgotten " is " between application and " to tell you "
Would you please be so kind as to help me?

Thank you
Where to begin...

You don't need to tell them that you are writing a letter of application. They know that.

You also don't need to tell them you are writing a letter to tell them how motivated you are. That is stating the obvious.

I would suggest that you start by telling them why you want to join the programme, for example:


Dear Sir / Madam,

The international section at XXX (name of lycée) excites / interests me because...


Or you could start by telling them a little bit about you:

Dear Sir / Madam,

I am currently about to complete my studies in XXX (name of where you are at the moment), where I have benefited from YYY (here tell them some of the things you have learned at your current school, in particular anything that makes you stand out - for example if you were in the band, in the school play etc.) I would like to pursue the next stage of my education at XXX (name of lycée) because...


Hope that helps!
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Re: Motivational letter need some help

The core form of the motivational letter is


I read in your website/brochure that you are looking for people like me. I found you because I was looking for a place with these qualities (a, b, c). Here is why I am a match for you, and you are a match for me: X,Y,Z


I look forward to attending your school/working in such an interesting environment/joining such a wonderful Choir/walking your dog.




Don't quote a,b,c, or X,Y,Z directly from their publications, but phrase it so that they are there, and believable.
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Re: Motivational letter need some help

Keep it simple

Dears

My motivations to apply for .... are...
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Re: Motivational letter need some help

Thank you but what if I want to keep the sentence " This letter of application to tell you how motivated I am " I don't know if its a correct sentence. Can you please help me about that
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Re: Motivational letter need some help

Are you sure you don't want www.englishforum.com?
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Thank you but what if I want to keep the sentence " This letter of application to tell you how motivated I am " I don't know if its a correct sentence. Can you please help me about that
This letter of application is to tell you how motivated I am.
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Thank you but what if I want to keep the sentence " This letter of application to tell you how motivated I am " I don't know if its a correct sentence. Can you please help me about that
i would avoid using the word "motivation" in a motivational letter.
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Re: Motivational letter need some help

Thank you so much and What about this letter of application ? Is it correct ?
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Re: Motivational letter need some help

Write about your successes, what drives you, your goals .
Be natural , be yourself
At the CV write at every job, describe the job you did in 2-3
sentences, start with the last job.
If there been gaps(unenployment, etc.), mention it, do not try to forget it.
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Re: Motivational letter need some help

Hi guys! I'm writing a motivational letter next year as well but I didn't want to create a new thread because this one has already a lot of useful information. I've read a lot of articles about writing a motivational letter, and this thread confirms that you shouldn't write word "motivation" in your letter, but how do I exactly show motivation in a program I enter. In all other stuff I've read on internet people suggest telling about book I've read or movie I've watched that is relevant to my field (creative writing) in case I don't have projects I've worked on before. But I feel not very confident about it. Like, I can read all Stephen Hawking because I'm fascinated by Universe and how it works, but it doesn't mean that I want to be and I am going to be physicist and cosmologist. And another question is, should I really mention hobbies that are not relevant to the creative writing. I've found some examples of motivational letters here in which a student that studies science tells about tennis. And he gives the biggest paragraph to it. I think that I should mention some of my hobbies but only briefly.
Okay, I've said too much but - it's just that I'm really nervous and I want everything to be perfect even though I know it's impossible and perfect is boring.
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Re: Motivational letter need some help

Look up keen on your Thesaurus. For me hobbies would be at the end of your CV as additional info on your character, not on a motivational letter.
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