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Old 22.09.2011, 22:05
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Does this sentence make sense? Alternatives?

"An integral part of this research was to understand the interrelationship between ICDPs and the sustainable tourism, agriculture and forestry industries, the knowledge from which will be extremely valuable for this position."

It's largely the last segment "the knowledge from which" that doesn't feel quite right. Does it make sense to the rest of you? How might you change it?

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Old 22.09.2011, 22:08
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"An integral part of this research was to understand the interrelationship between ICDPs and the sustainable tourism, agriculture and forestry industries, the knowledge from which will be extremely valuable for this position."

It's largely the last segment "the knowledge from which" that doesn't feel quite right. Does it make sense to the rest of you? How might you change it?

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It makes sense to me.
You could change it to
..., from which the resulting knowledge will be valuable for this position."
or
..., resulting in valuable knowledge for this position."
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Old 22.09.2011, 22:10
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Re: Does this sentence make sense? Alternatives?

Yeah, I think my qualm lies in whether it should be "the knowledge from which" or "from which the knowledge"...

Bah, too many applications, saying different things the same way over and over.
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Old 22.09.2011, 22:11
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Re: Does this sentence make sense? Alternatives?

seems to be translated from French..
- une connaissance de celle-ci

How about:
Indepth experience and knoweldge of the interrelationship between ICDPs and the sustainable tourism, agriculture and forestry industries, would be valuable and desired in this position ?

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"An integral part of this research was to understand the interrelationship between ICDPs and the sustainable tourism, agriculture and forestry industries, the knowledge from which will be extremely valuable for this position."

It's largely the last segment "the knowledge from which" that doesn't feel quite right. Does it make sense to the rest of you? How might you change it?

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I would suggest:

"An integral part of this research was understanding the inter-relationship between ICDPs and the sustainable tourism, agriculture and forestry industries; said knowledge being extremely relevant to this position."
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Old 22.09.2011, 22:20
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Re: Does this sentence make sense? Alternatives?

Use two sentences. There is no way of putting it into one that doesnt sound convoluted, forced or shakespearian
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"An integral part of this research was to understand the interrelationship between ICDPs and the sustainable tourism, agriculture and forestry industries, the knowledge from which will be extremely valuable for this position."

It's largely the last segment "the knowledge from which" that doesn't feel quite right. Does it make sense to the rest of you? How might you change it?

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Where you say it doesn't feel right, I felt the same way. I would end your previous sentence, and start a new one.
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"An integral part of this research was to understand the interrelationship between ICDPs and the sustainable tourism, agriculture and forestry industries, the knowledge from which will be extremely valuable for this position."
You need to work "gained" or "acquired" into the knowledge bit in place of "from which" I think. "The knowledge gained during this research would be..." although that may mean you need to re-word earlier bits to avoid over-repeating "research".

Nicolaschulz's "said knowledge" is going along the same lines.
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Old 22.09.2011, 22:34
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Re: Does this sentence make sense? Alternatives?

Thanks for all your replies. I've decided to go with:

"An integral part of this research was to develop an understanding of the interrelationship between ICDPs and the tourism, agriculture and forestry industries. The knowledge gained as a result will prove extremely useful when performing duties for staff in related programs."
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Old 22.09.2011, 22:55
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Thanks for all your replies. I've decided to go with:

"An integral part of this research was to develop an understanding of the interrelationship between ICDPs and the tourism, agriculture and forestry industries. The knowledge gained as a result will prove extremely useful when performing duties for staff in related programs."
That sounds OK, although I still think that interrelationship should be hyphenated, ie, inter-relationship.

And perhaps 'The knowledge acquired will prove extremely useful when applied to staff in their use of related programmes.'
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